
Absent
Alone was how she felt, regardless of his presence.
Betrayal felt strong as his eyes averted to the screens.
Somebody else seemed to occupy his focus more.
Every time she looked his way, his eyes were glistening.
Not understanding, she started looking for other signs.
Time ran out when she saw them thinking they were alone.
…
Trust
Absent from the days and nights
Although she saw his distant gaze
Nothing more to realize
And when she saw him, she would sigh
It seemed he would be gone for days
Absent from the days and nights
Even though he’d be in sight
His distance made him seem away
Nothing more to realize
As he’d bother not with lies
It was clear no more dismay
Absent from the days and nights
When she saw him hold her tight
He was bound to walk away
Nothing more to realize
He looked at her and said goodbye
When he left her on that day
Absent from the days and nights
Nothing more to realize
…
Assuming
As she slept peacefully, he admired her, happy she was all in.
Believing in them, he could not wait to say: I do.
Selecting her gift, he wanted something of memorium.
Enlisting the aid of his work mate, she knew what to do.
Not spoiling the surprise, discreetly, he met her at a bar.
Taking the gift for his wife, giving a hug, he went home.
…..
I did a triple focus on the same theme for the Six Sentence Story challenge.
The first is an acrostic of the word “Absent”
The second is a villanelle using “Absent” and the first time I have written in this form.
The last is an acrostic of “Absent” and if you look closely, there is another message vertically given at the end of each line. It’s not really a double acrostic, but just another play with words.
I was going for the effect of the last acrostic pulling the conclusion together.
Thank you to Denise for continuing to challenge us.
You can go to this LINK to learn more and perhaps participate.
Genius!
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Aww shucks…
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Wonderful, Lisa! I really enjoyed the 2nd one, in villanelle form.
I’d read a little bit about the form after you mentioned it last week. Seemed a bit intimidating 😀
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Thank you! A good challenge for sure. Once you lay out the repeats it starts opening up to possibilities.
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all three are beautifully written and full of emotion. Wow three!!
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Thank you!
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Cool, cool, cool!
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Thank you!
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WOW! You are such a gifted poet!
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Awww you are so kind.
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So so good! (Sorry to be so late in commenting. my computer, rest its soul, went home to be with the Lord and I was doing everything from the iPhone which would not allow me to comment on your blog and a couple of others.) great post, great six. I love the way you do this, it’s a real talent
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Thank you and I am sorry for your loss. Glad you’re UP and running!
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